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【答案】

Optimism is important in all aspects of our life．If you can change your mind from pessimism, you can change your life．

Up to the beginning of Senior Grade Two, I did poorly in my English but I didn’t give in because I was always encouraged by both the people around me and myself．I kept practicing speaking, listening, reading and writing．When I was fed up with reading or writing, I usually entertained myself by reading some interesting English stories, jokes and humors or seeing English films．When I had some trouble in reciting or memorizing, I tried to amuse myself by playing word games or singing English songs．By this means, I always made myself cheerful and optimistic, full of splendid and colorful dreams of future．I kept practicing．Gradually, I made progress in my English．．

Thanks to the optimism, I have become one of the top students in my class by now．

【解析】

试题分析：本篇书面表达属于话题类作文，根据提示信息和要求行文。写作时注意以下几点：1、仔细阅读有关提示，弄清试题提供的所有信息，明确有哪些要点。2、提纲是文章的总体框架，要在提纲的范围内进行分析、构思和想象。本文写作时可以按照夹叙夹议的方式来写3、根据要表达的内容确定句子的时态、语态；就本文而言应该用一般现在时和过去时连用。 4.注意使用高级词汇和句式，以增加文章的亮点。

【亮点说明】本文结构紧凑，层次分明，而且使用了多种句式和结构。比如运用条件状语从句：If you can change your mind from pessimism, you can change your life；使用强调：I did poorly in my English but I didn’t give in because I was always encouraged by both the people around me and myself；运用时间状语从句：When I was fed up with reading or writing, I usually entertained myself by reading some interesting English stories, jokes and humors or seeing English films．When I had some trouble in reciting or memorizing, I tried to amuse myself by playing word games or singing English songs．等。此外，文章还使用了大量短语in all aspects of，Up to the beginning of，give in，keep doing，be fed up with，have some trouble in，By this means等使用使文章内容更具有层次感，也使语言更加连贯。