近来,电子红包在中国正成为一种时尚

【答案】

Dear Peter,

I’m writing to tell you something about e-hongbao, which is becoming popular in China.

E-hongbao is actually a kind of lucky money from and to relatives and friends during festivals or on special occasions. For many young people, grabbing e-hongbao on their mobile phones is a fairly common and exciting activity. Unlike the tradition of elders giving lucky money to children, over half of the people sending e-hongbao are in their 20s. It’s just for fun or giving best wishes, while the sum of money matters little. In a word, e-hongbao is bringing new color to the old tradition.

Nevertheless, I’m concerned about the safety of on-line payment. So rules and regulations need to be improved  regarding the e-hongbao system to guarantee its operation. (110 words)

Best wishes.

Yours

Li Hua

【解析】

试题分析：这篇作文要求我们根据所给要点，介绍电子红包的有关情况。

内容包括：1．红包特点2. 发放时间与途径3. 参与人群4. 你的看法。写作时，我们可以根据需要将这些信息进行整理和安排，使文章的意思衔接更自然。文中所使用的词汇和句型，是学生们比较熟悉的，所以将平时的积累发挥出来就可以。当然我们要尽量使用一些好的句型和连词，使文章上下文意思连贯，更出彩。

写作亮点：这是一篇非常优秀的作文，短文中作者按照题目的要求条理清楚，结构清晰，要点全面。而且作者在写作时，并不是完全按照题目中给出的顺序，逐句翻译的，而是将这些信息进行了整合，让意思关联紧密的放在一起表达。短文中的语言合乎英语的表达规范，而且作者还使用了一些较好的词汇和句式，增强了文章的连贯性。如定语从句、不定式表目的、非谓语动词的用法。special occasions.，fairly common，in their 20s， concerned about，guarantee等词汇和Unlike，In a word，Nevertheless等连接词等。